Edited and done: As he stood from his crouched position next to me, I thought I heard the faint sound of crackling in his pocket. I looked up at him and he look back down at me with his shining movie-star smile as he reached into his pocket to reveal a small stash of caramels in his weathered hand. As he lowered back down to my level, he picked me up and offered me one of his delicious delicacies. I quickly thanked him as I ripped that clear layer of plastic off to smell that buttery sweet candy.
I had my mom and dad read over just one paragraph at a time and tell what was wrong with them-if they didn't make sense or if something was spelled wrong.
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